WRITING GUIDE · 英文作文範例
一趟博物館之旅，
從構思到修訂。
同一個故事，看構思、初稿和修訂。每次只讀一步。
有事件，
還需要一條故事線。
ONE STORY, THREE VIEWS · 教學示例
一步一步，
把故事寫完整。
一趟博物館之旅
先為每一段留下內容，再開始寫。
Saturday · science museum · Mum
I lost sight of Mum.
- crowded room
- looked at a rocket
- turned around
I asked a guide for help.
- information desk
- Mum’s jacket
- an announcement
We found each other.
- Mum came over
- I waved
- held her hand
Relieved · stay together next time
FIRST DRAFT · 按構思圖展開
A Day at the Museum
On Saturday, I went to the science museum with Mum. I wanted to see the rocket.
The room was crowded. I looked at the rocket. I turned around and could not see Mum. I was scared.
I went to the information desk. I told a guide about Mum’s jacket. The guide made an announcement.
Mum came over. I waved to her. I held her hand.
I felt relieved. Next time, I would stay close to Mum.
REVISION · 讓意思更完整
A Day at the Museum
On Saturday, Mum and I visited the science museum. I could not wait to see the rocket.
The room was crowded, but I stopped to look at the tall rocket. When I turned around, Mum was no longer beside me. I stood on tiptoe and searched the room, but I could not find her.
I walked to the information desk and asked a guide for help. “Mum is wearing a red jacket,” I explained. The guide made an announcement and asked me to wait beside the desk.
A few minutes later, Mum hurried towards us. I waved and reached for her hand. I told her how the guide had helped me.
I felt relieved to be with Mum again. The rocket was exciting, but finding each other was the most important part of our day. Next time, we would explore the museum together.
自擬教學示例，非真實學生作品。
修訂的重點，
不是每句都變長。
I told a guide about Mum’s jacket.
↓“Mum is wearing a red jacket,” I explained.
換成自己的故事，怎麼練？
先記下背景、問題、行動、結果與回望。再問：事件接得起來嗎？細節有用途嗎？結尾能連回經歷嗎？
