WRITING GUIDE · 英作文の例
ある日の博物館、
構想から推敲まで。
同じ物語を、構想・下書き・推敲で見比べます。一度に一つのステップずつ。
出来事があれば、
物語の流れも必要です。
ONE STORY, THREE VIEWS · 指導方法の例
一歩ずつ、
物語を完成させる。
ある日の博物館
書き始める前に、各段落に入れる内容を整理します。
Saturday · science museum · Mum
I lost sight of Mum.
- crowded room
- looked at a rocket
- turned around
I asked a guide for help.
- information desk
- Mum’s jacket
- an announcement
We found each other.
- Mum came over
- I waved
- held her hand
Relieved · stay together next time
FIRST DRAFT · 構想を文章にする
A Day at the Museum
On Saturday, I went to the science museum with Mum. I wanted to see the rocket.
The room was crowded. I looked at the rocket. I turned around and could not see Mum. I was scared.
I went to the information desk. I told a guide about Mum’s jacket. The guide made an announcement.
Mum came over. I waved to her. I held her hand.
I felt relieved. Next time, I would stay close to Mum.
REVISION · 意味をより明確に
A Day at the Museum
On Saturday, Mum and I visited the science museum. I could not wait to see the rocket.
The room was crowded, but I stopped to look at the tall rocket. When I turned around, Mum was no longer beside me. I stood on tiptoe and searched the room, but I could not find her.
I walked to the information desk and asked a guide for help. “Mum is wearing a red jacket,” I explained. The guide made an announcement and asked me to wait beside the desk.
A few minutes later, Mum hurried towards us. I waved and reached for her hand. I told her how the guide had helped me.
I felt relieved to be with Mum again. The rocket was exciting, but finding each other was the most important part of our day. Next time, we would explore the museum together.
指導方法を説明するために作成した例であり、実際の生徒の作品ではありません。
推敲の目的は、
すべての文を長くすることではありません。
I told a guide about Mum’s jacket.
↓“Mum is wearing a red jacket,” I explained.
自分の物語では、どう練習する？
まず背景・問題・行動・結果・振り返りを整理します。出来事はつながっていますか。具体的な内容は役に立っていますか。結末は体験につながっていますか。
