WRITING GUIDE · 작문 예시
박물관에서 보낸 하루,
구상부터 수정까지.
하나의 이야기를 구상, 초안, 수정본으로 살펴봅니다. 한 번에 한 단계씩 읽어 보세요.
사건이 있다면,
이야기의 흐름도 필요합니다.
ONE STORY, THREE VIEWS · 수업 방식 예시
한 단계씩,
이야기를 완성합니다.
박물관에서 보낸 하루
각 문단에 담을 내용을 먼저 정리합니다.
Saturday · science museum · Mum
I lost sight of Mum.
- crowded room
- looked at a rocket
- turned around
I asked a guide for help.
- information desk
- Mum’s jacket
- an announcement
We found each other.
- Mum came over
- I waved
- held her hand
Relieved · stay together next time
FIRST DRAFT · 계획을 글로 펼치기
A Day at the Museum
On Saturday, I went to the science museum with Mum. I wanted to see the rocket.
The room was crowded. I looked at the rocket. I turned around and could not see Mum. I was scared.
I went to the information desk. I told a guide about Mum’s jacket. The guide made an announcement.
Mum came over. I waved to her. I held her hand.
I felt relieved. Next time, I would stay close to Mum.
REVISION · 의미를 더 분명하게
A Day at the Museum
On Saturday, Mum and I visited the science museum. I could not wait to see the rocket.
The room was crowded, but I stopped to look at the tall rocket. When I turned around, Mum was no longer beside me. I stood on tiptoe and searched the room, but I could not find her.
I walked to the information desk and asked a guide for help. “Mum is wearing a red jacket,” I explained. The guide made an announcement and asked me to wait beside the desk.
A few minutes later, Mum hurried towards us. I waved and reached for her hand. I told her how the guide had helped me.
I felt relieved to be with Mum again. The rocket was exciting, but finding each other was the most important part of our day. Next time, we would explore the museum together.
수업 방식을 설명하기 위해 만든 예시이며, 실제 학생의 글이 아닙니다.
수정의 핵심은,
모든 문장을 늘리는 것이 아닙니다.
I told a guide about Mum’s jacket.
↓“Mum is wearing a red jacket,” I explained.
내 이야기로는 어떻게 연습할까요?
배경, 문제, 행동, 결과, 돌아보기를 먼저 적어 보세요. 사건은 연결되나요? 세부 내용은 도움이 되나요? 결말은 경험과 이어지나요?
